Right Direction?
Not Sure.. that´s the Part you step in, comentkill it, reanimate it, do it again... but no harsh words or you will be drowned in Trolltears
Everything about it just seems terribly contrasting. It looks like it's divided into several parts to me - The top swirly third of the sky, the middle third of the sky with the lasers, the bottom third, the mountain, and then the bird, all of which look completely separate from all the other parts (except maybe the top of the sky and the bird sort of go together).
Maybe some info about the theme/tone of the book would help?